The Elf Girl
A Fantasy Novel By a Young Writer
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REVIEW BY ADAM TERREL
The-elf-girl (Shannon)
http://www.freewebs.com/the-elf-girl/
- Layout 3/5 (Your home page gets right to the point. Your pictures are high guality and don't push off the side of the page or anything. Though you do need to spend a little more time on your Characters page. The most content is there, so that needs the most work and attention. Some of the pictures on that page have also been artificially resized. You need to pick a standard font size. On the "Ideas from You" page, you don't need three separate places to comment.)
- Text 3/4 (The text looks wonderful, but you miss a couple of commas, and there are a lot of uncompensated sentence fragments. By that I mean that there are ways to integrate sentense fragments to go along with sentences by using dashes, colons, and elipses [elipsis singular]. — : ... As you can see I compensate for quite a few myself. I'm sorry to have to get a little technical, but that's a good thing. It means you're coming close to getting a 4 here.)
- Content 3/4 (You have a lot of interesting information about the characters of your story and such. It will be a lot more intriguing once the novel is completed.)
- Navigation 3/4 (The pages well-specify their content, but you need to at least alphabetize your page list ignoring the article "the." "The Elf Girl [novel]" would go in an "E" position—such as "Elf Girl [novel], The.")
- Purpose 4/4 (A novel being written by an eleven-year-old—I do have to say that I am impressed here. Just make sure to actually complete it.)
- Network 4/4 (You have enough relevant links to other writing web sites. They all look nice too. You have quality and quantity.)
Score: 20/25 = 80%
Summary: This is an interesting site about a fantasy novel. I have to say that it is very well-done. It's miles above your previously entered sites. There are a couple of areas that need a little work, but everything else is perfect. The real measure of this site will be the book when it is finished.
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Euthalia
Navigation- 10/10 It's actually very easy to get around this website. Use of punctiation is really precise and meaningful. For example, things that she wants to build suspense about have a series of periods (....) to show there's more behind it. Things with exclamation points show excitement. Nice thinking!
Organization- 9/10 You have a very good organizational plan. Your 'Let It Unravel' page could use some more content boxes and organization, but you'd have to be picky to notice it.
Visual- 10/10 Beautiful variety of pictures and images! Excellent work with this.
Creativity And Orginality- 10/10 Yet another 10! This site is just bursting with creativity; every page is. Its very inspiring (it sparked the idea for this site)
Mechanics- 9/10 Very minor errors here and there, but still well worded
Content- 10/10 There is so much wonderful content on this website! There's so much to read and do and participate in- you'll definately come back for more!
Layout- 9/10 I definately wouldn't have chosen that template, but it seems you've made it work for you. I think that the 'imagine' picture is a nice touch and adds some color to the surroundings. Background pictures are usually exceptional.
Dedication- 10/10 There is so much content! The webmaster probably spent a long time planning all of it. Excellent dedication.
Clarity- 10/10 Wording very clear and precise, elegantly written
Overall- 10/10
Extra Points- +2 for your beautiful music in the background
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Ultimate Gaming Guide
http://www.ultimategamingguide.co.nr/
Navigation- 8/10. Your navigation is easy to follow, you have a generally clear organization. Some pages could be combined such as Links and Links&Sponsoring to provide room for new pages. On some of your pages, the extra word "page" (xbox page, nintendo page, etc.) is not needed. I would take that off.
Organization- 9/10. Everything is pretty well placed. I saw some small little glitches, probably to do with your template (this happens to me all the time). I suggest fixing them.
Visual- 7/10. I admit you do have a nice visual, but there's barely any color. Add some cool logos or images (this is not counting your template which did seem very colorful and interesting).
Creativity And Originality- 8/10. I give you credit. You're taking a completely common theme (gaming) and making it your own. That's a good thing. Just be careful, make some more orignal things. Your site has some nice pages with tons of info which can make it more popular. I just feel you need something BIG like a certain competition or event that'll put visitors on end.
Mechanics- 9/10. You did pretty well in this area. Minor errors, but nice considering most gaming sites are just scattered "Text Talk".
Content- 8/10. There is a lot of interesting content that will be enjoyed by gamers. I'd add something for 'begininers' though. You know: tips and tricks.
Layout- 9/10. You have a pretty exceptional layout, nice color choices.
Dedication- 9/10. It seems you have put a LOT of effort into this website, but I noticed there are some things you do not update regurly. I only took off a point for that though, because I am as much to blame.
Clarity- 9/10. Things are generally clear.
Overall- 8/10
Extra Points- +1 for music on homepage
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Softball Star
Navigation- 8/10…Nice job with this category. However, since all of your pages pretty much have to do with the same thing (softball) I would shorten the names a bit. For example, Softball Tips could simply be changed to Tips. It also might be a good idea to put them in alphabetical order, but that’s personal preference.
Organization- 10/10…I really cannot find any problems with your organization! Everything’s well laid out, text looks nice, and everything has a place. The Credits page was especially exceptional. Excellent work with this!
Visual- 9/10…Very good work with this! The layout is fun and colorful. It totally suits the purpose of your website and expresses the theme. Not only that, but it’s professional, clean cut and cool! I applaud you for choosing yellow as your base color…it was a very good choice, and backs up all of your content wonderfully! I took off that one point for minor reasons…it needs some minor finishing touches. But overall, your visual is unbelievable!
Creativity & Originality- 8/10…I was actually going to give you a six on this. I felt that softball was a very general topic, and was common amongst sites. But then I noticed your Character Page. I loved it! They are all so original, funny, and well thought out! I absolutely adored everything. Therefore, I had to raise your score! The creativity on that page was awesome (especially Homer Un. I love how it sounds like Home Run!) Great job with this.
Mechanics- 10/10…I couldn’t find any problems with this. Nice work!
Content- 8/10…Your character bio page, comic page, and cheers page was AMAZING! I loved them. Good content, nice organization. Good job. However, I didn’t see a lot of other “stand out” content amongst your site. The Tips are good, and presented well. However, you’ll need more of them if you want to establish a WHOLE PAGE full of them. The Horoscopes page was excellent, very well written…however; you might want to add some more content to it.
Layout- 10/10…Excellent job! Nothing is wrong.
Dedication- 8/10…Although you have little content, I believe you put a lot of effort into the website! You seem to update regularly.
Clarity- 10/10 GREAT!!!
Overall- 8/10
Extra Points- +1 for great template!
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Myurian Quest
www.thecheung.com/kylie/myuri.html
Navigation: 10/10. Your navigation is efficient and easy to use. I love it! You’ve organized your nav bar in a clear, concise way. Everything is a logical order.
Organization: 10/10. Lovely work! Everything is absolutely organized and in place. I see no problems with this category at all.
Visual: 10/10. This is one of the strongest points of all the website. Your visual is absolutely gorgeous, stunning, and insightful. Every time I enter your website, it takes my breath away. You must be very skilled with HTML. I know I could never accomplish such a unique, professional, beautiful visual. Well done!
Creativity And Originality: 10/10. Wow. Your site is just so perfect! Again, I can find nothing wrong. The website is extremely creative. Almost every word is from your imagination! I adore it. The story is so magical. Every time I read it, I seem to drift from my home all the way to Myuri… excellent work.
Mechanics: 10/10. Flawless! What can I say? All your grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. is absolutely perfect.
Content: 10/-10. Wow! Another ten. Honestly, I cannot believe your content. You have extraordinary quality and extraordinary quantity. It would take me hours to get through all your material- but that’s an AWESOME thing. People are more likely to visit your site again, if you have lots of content to look at. Not only is that, but none of your content is pure rubbish. It all has a place and a meaning and a purpose. Love it.
Layout: 10/10. Oh my! Am I ever going to have to give you less than a ten?? Anyway, your layout is incredible, something I’d never be able to create. Unbelievable job.
Dedication: 10/10. Wow. It must have taken so much work to build such a great site.
Clarity: 10/10. Wonderful!!!
Overall: 10/10
Extra Points: +5 for your amazing visual and story- can’t get enough!
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