Poetry By Chuck

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Today I have to tell you I'm feeling up TIGHT!
I don't know who or what to blame, but I'll find something by tonight.
There ...there it is...and I know that I"m right!
Showing itself so obviously and so rudely into my life.



There is a little spot on the carpet that's showing so bright.
This damned little spot that has entered my sight!
You're the root of ALL my troubles ALL of my life!!
You're the cause of all my problems that I've had with my wife.



You're the one that made me slip and cut myself with a knife.
I know that you influenced the dog that gave me that bite.
Don't try to deny it, because you know, I know I'm right.
You made me say those things that got me into that fight.



I'm going to attack you now and rid myself of this plight!
I'm going to rub you OUT and...I KNOW... it will feel right!
RUB you right out of existence, right out of sight.
You damned little spot on the carpet that's causing such strife.


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Author's Comments
So often we need to just blow off steam.  Perhaps picking on a harmless spot on the carpet will help?!? lol.

Comments

Click Here on Dec 19, 2003, 6:30 p.m. 
You Never Heard Such Talk!!! 654 critiques, 141 poems. :
Verdict: Spotless In Seattle!!!

Out damned spot! I can now say that I have heard it all.   

 Willow on Mar 18, 2004, 1:43 
"If we lose hope, we can never achieve our dreams" 3942 critiques, 136 poems. Verdict: good

Oh my goodness. I certainly got a giggle out of this. A great poem here. Could be classified as a rant I suppose. I will be reading more of your works. Thanks for sharing.  

New Massacre on Mar 18, 2004, 1:50 
Buried Alive Behind Enemy Lines 2582 critiques, 0 poems.

Hahahaha, people blame stupid things for their troubles... And more to the point even if they made the little spot they blame someone else for doing it even though it blatantly wasnt anyone elses fault but their own.

Aaaaaaaanywho

a lot of the time you've used the word 'Your' when you need to use the word 'You're' cos you're saying YOU ARE the cause oh... you get the idea....

My advice to you is to get some vanish carpet cleaner....

 

Jadey xXxXx   

Lo Justin on Mar 18, 2004, 2:00 
I 1461 critiques, 30 poems.

Ha...if you have enough shit going on in your life you could get a lot of cleaning done. This is funny, but at the same time speaks the truth. So often we 'cover up' an area we are ashamed in by cleaning out other areas, feeling like we are in control, but even as you scrub with the resolve, you are a slave to the process. Whew, i took this one deep, but i hope you don't mind. It was funny, and i hope you have also looked into the possibility of how deep it can go (deeper), but i'll stop rambling here, and if you want, i can come back and say more about it.  Thanks for sharing, and happy st. patties day. I think i'll have another. Watch out for the stain.
Peace,
 Lo  

alain on Mar 18, 2004, 2:02 
4 critiques, 0 poems.

This poem at the beginning will get your mind wondering and my mind was going the wrong way....a very good poem anyway.  

Flagrancy on Mar 18, 2004, 2:23 
Don't wake me from my dream 1204 critiques, 217 poems.
Verdict: !Groovy!

lol this was quite uplifting...this was a great poem to share...I liked the mood and voice in this...wonderful job  

Kathyarin on Sep 10, 2004, 11:52 p.m. 
Judgement closes the doors to understanding. 122 critiques, 19 poems.

lol, cute... if you hadn't overdone it so well, I'd have wondered if that spot was a metaphor. This though, controllable vent for frustration! Srub that spot until it's all better... of course, then you'll have the spot to blame for your aching knees and soapy waterlogged fingers  

 mistic moonlite on Sep 29, 2005, 8:20 
Family&Friends,in world that you can trust 3788 critiques, 489 poems. Currently online.

Those spots are disposable, although they try to make it
rough,,I love the humor in this thank you for sharing and letting us lol! Linda  

 

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