Poetry By Chuck

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With a tink and a tap and a rat a tat tat.
Its raining outside, imagine that.

With a plink and a thump and a thunderous thaaawk.
The rain pelts the roof, sounding just like that!

Dinkley drop, pinkley hop all in a wap.
The rain bounces and hops all about with a snap.

In a sheet, or a torrent, or a tremendous roar,
The rain courses by, loud as a musical score!

In a rap rap rap and a tat tat tat and a pat pat pat,
The rain announces it arrival on the top of my hat!

With a dink dink dink and a plink plink plink,
The rain makes my thoughts go plink-it-e wink.

It patters all about with a plink and pat,
I'm gettin' tired just thinkin' bout that!



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Author's Comments
The delightful experience of a light rain after a period of intense arid conditions.  How to describe the feeling?

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Krishnaa on Dec 21, 2003 
1041 critiques, 54 poems.

You got it absolutely right. A rain on a hot summer day sounds as delightful as you have described. And, if we have hailstones falling on the roofs... Yummy!!
krishna  

le Chaton on Dec 21, 2003, 5:51 
Formerly "SmutKitten" 329 critiques, 49 poems.

Aww I really like this! I could almost hear the raindrops hitting the roof as I read along!

"In a sheet, or a torrent, or a tremendous roar,
The rain courses by, loud as a musical score!"

This is my favorite line - I'm a music lover/long-ago musician and I love this metaphor. Great write!

SK  

 genielassie on Dec 29, 2003, 9:44 
What is the weight of a solitary word? 5350 critiques, 110 poems.

oh my! a tounge twister too!!! this is wonderful and it's one I think I should memorize aswell and put a tune to for my daughter who is having some trouble with her pronunciation of words...this might help her since she talks too fast and that is about 50% of her difficult...lol...She'd have to slow down to copy me in this one...Great write and best of wishes as well...~genielassie~  

 cherche -d -ame on Dec 29, 2003, 6:20 p.m. 
you are the owner of your every dream 11093 critiques, 459 poems.

Loved the easy flow of this...no angst , no abuse , no horror...just a rap rap and a tap tap and a pat pat 
Reenie

Bluestar on Dec 31, 2003, 4:14 
2087 critiques, 90 poems. said:

A great write here, your onomatopoeia usage in this write really does round the poem off, making the coming of this rain even more exciting.

Well Done!

Blue   

 Hoosierpoet on Jan 19, 2004, 9:42 p.m. 
Poetry is the music of the heart 1947 critiques, 242 poems.
Verdict: very good

You brought a smile to my face with this little poem, Chuck! I had to read this, because I have always loved the rain so much. This would make a nice read for youngsters on a rainy day. I have written a few poems with whimsical sound effects like this, and I can appreciate your effort in writing this. Very well done! 

Best wishes,
Moses  

 AngelSeeker on Jan 29, 2004, 8:46 p.m. 
1274 critiques, 36 poems.

This was an enjoyable little ditty. I agree that children might like the whimisal  

Bethie on Dec 02, 2005, 9:05 p.m. 
I 603 critiques, 41 poems.

This is cute, and well written, made me smile.

 

 

 

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